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Reading an Admission Essay
Staying Sane During the College Admissions Process
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Reading an Admission Essay
by Josh Henry

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In the three years that I worked as an Assistant Dean of Undergraduate Admission at the College of William & Mary, I estimate that I read more than 7,000 college essays. Yet, when students, parents or counselors ask, "What makes a good essay?", I'm not able to launch into a concrete description of the perfect piece of writing that will win the heart of an admission officer. There's not one attribute or even a list of qualities that guarantees a good essay. A good essay is an informative and engaging piece of writing that effectively conveys whether or not an applicant's personality is a match for the institution to which he or she is applying -- not a simple task, I know.


Usually, I would read the essay after going through the student's personal, family and extracurricular information, but before reviewing their transcript and letters of recommendation. I approached the applicant's writing with a fundamental knowledge of his or her background but without any prejudices based on his or her academic record. What I hoped to learn from the essay was more about the student's character and personality than I could infer from the combination of hometown, high school setting, activities and interests.


Start Strong

Due to the high volume of applications and essays I read on a daily and weekly basis, it was important for an essay to start strong. I wasn't necessarily looking for a shocking opening line, but if the first few sentences presented the promise of a compelling personal story or demonstrated that the applicant was a strong writer, there was a good chance that I would take my time carefully reading the rest of the essay. If, on the other hand, the first few sentences read bland or failed to capture my interest, I'd work through the rest of the essay quicker and with less attention.


Content Counts

I always read an essay scouring for personal revelations - insights that would enable me to better understand who the applicant is. They could be humorous, evocative or sincere. They could describe an experience, explain a point of view, or just describe some unique and endearing personality quirks. Whatever the focus and tone of the essay was, I wanted it to add substantive information to the application. It could elaborate on an activity, trait or achievement referenced elsewhere, but I did not want the essay to rehash what I already read - I wanted to discover something new.


I also read essays to gauge an applicant's writing ability. Writing is an important part of the curriculum across all subjects at William & Mary, as it is at most colleges and universities across the country. I wasn't dissecting students' grammar and vocabularies when reading essays, but it was important to me that the writing was refined, flowed nicely and demonstrated an ease with language. Poor writing might raise concern for the student's academic ability, while a careless composition could be a turnoff to an otherwise strong application.


Practice, Practice, Practice

Until I began keeping a blog, I did not practice personal reflective writing on a regular basis. It's not easy and I sympathize with all students attempting to encapsulate themselves in 500 characters or less. Like most activities, reflective writing becomes easier with practice. Start keeping a journal or maintaining a blog that you feel comfortable sharing with others. The more time and energy you invest, your writing will surely improve, and a good journal or blog entry could easily become an outstanding college essay.

Stop the Insanity! Staying Sane During the College Admissions Process

Even though the school year has just started for us here in New England, the college application frenzy is going fast and furious. From filling out the Common Application to writing and rewriting essays to scheduling interviews, it is very easy for students (and parents) to get caught up in the flurry of activity that comes with the college admissions process. However, while a little stress during this process is unavoidable, this doesn't mean that the next four or five months have to be complete chaos. Here are a few simple steps to help students keep their cool during the throes of college application fever:

Take Time to De-stress: If you are feeling overwhelmed, sit down and take a deep breath. Go for a walk, talk to a friend (about something fun - no college talk!), or do something else to help you relax. While a little pressure can certainly help motivate some people, being a complete basket case will only make the experience worse.

Set Realistic Goals: After you have calmed down, you need to come up with a game plan. Make a list of what needs to be done, such as completing applications, writing supplemental essays, and getting teacher recommendations. Then, decide what you can realistically accomplish on a given day, taking into account your school and extracurricular schedule. Even though you might have the best of intentions when you decide to complete a science project, compete in a soccer tournament, and write all of your supplemental essays in one day, you are setting yourself up for a great deal of anxiety and also for some frustration when you aren't able to complete your ambitious checklist. By keeping your goals realistic, you can complete your tasks in a timely fashion while avoiding a meltdown.

Don't Show All of Your Cards: It is understandable that students want to share their college plans with their circle of friends. However, I strongly urge you to resist this temptation. In many cases, full disclosure can do more harm than good. Besides causing you to second guess many of your decisions based on your friends' unintended criticisms ("Why are you looking at that school? It's in the middle of nowhere!"), you also must face the inevitable questions about where you got in and where you didn't. Finally, talking about college all of the time can be very nerve-wracking.

Don't Wait Until the Last Minute: With good planning, you should have your application materials done well before the application deadlines for your schools. There is nothing sadder (or more stressful), than frantically typing away at a computer on December 31 (or, for those of your doing Early Action or Early Decision, October 31), trying to crank out one more essay before the clock strikes midnight. Besides depriving yourself of a good time, working while under duress can cause you to make careless mistakes that undermine your best efforts. Even if you write a brilliant essay for a college, the admissions officer might be distracted by the numerous typos you didn't have a chance to correct.

It is also a good idea to submit your application several days before the final deadline. That way you can make sure that the school received it without any errors. I knew a student in California who was applying to several schools on the East Coast. She worked furiously on an application that was due by midnight on December 31 and hit the "Submit" button at 11:59 pm. Unfortunately, she didn't take into account the time difference, and the school's server would not accept her application.

Introducing Josh Henry, the Newest Member of Educational Associates

We are pleased to announce that Josh Henry has joined Educational Advocates as a college counseling associate. He earned a master's degree in Higher Education Administration from Boston College in 2010. Originally from Lancaster, PA, Josh attended the College of William & Mary for his undergraduate education, where he majored in English and received a certification in secondary education. After teaching high school English in the Fairfax County Public Schools system, he returned to his alma mater and spent three years as an Assistant Dean of Undergraduate Admission. He developed a passion for assisting students in furthering their educations that he carries with him to Educational Advocates.

While teaching, Josh coached freshmen boys' basketball at Herndon High School and sports remain his greatest non-vocational passion. At William & Mary he sculpted much of the Admission Office's online and email communications and worked with many of their student groups. He was an active member of the Virginia Association of Collegiate Registrars and Admission Officers (VACRAO), and served as the Web Coordinator for the organization.

At Educational Advocates, Josh utilizes his English background and admission experience to assist students and families through all phases of the college search process. Josh will also help guide our clients who are student athletes through the recruitment process.

Please join us in welcoming Josh.
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