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Bette Frick
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Managing employees' writing
Readers scored an "A" on last month's quiz
Moving on to semicolons
For Fun: My plea to the Navy SEALs
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Watch this monthly newsletter for these grammar lessons:
  • Four uses of commas
  • Two uses of semicolons
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"Here is a lesson in creative writing. First rule: Do not use semicolons. They are transvestite hermaphrodites representing absolutely nothing. All they do is show you've been to college."

Kurt Vonnegut
A Man Without a Country
US novelist (1922-2007)
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Quiz on the semicolon

How would you punctuate this sentence?

 

Two units were closed on May 22, 2011 the last unit was closed on May 29, 2011. 


 

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Ah, May was busy! Several trips, revising my textbook, and planting my organic garden filled the month until I realized that I wouldn't have time to write to you. I hope you enjoy my June newsletter.
How to better manage employees' writing

Good writing doesn't happen by accident, but good writing does happen. Employees want to communicate well but may lack skills or experience. In addition, their managers may not know how to model good communication. (I hope that most managers are not as dysfunctional as one whom I just encountered: His employees told me that he required them to change everything in their drafts, and then on second review, he made them change it all back to the original text.)  


We will assume that managers want to encourage employees to write better. One major strategy that will help employees is to nurture a writing process and recognize that good writing requires several steps. Tell employees that it takes more time to follow this process than to dash off a draft, but the process will result in clearer, better quality documents with less rework.


A second way to help your employees is to set objective standards (specifications) for good writing and provide examples. Give as much guidance as possible and spell out your expectations explicitly before your writers start prewriting. If you have templates, samples, or examples, share them. Most writers will look for examples or patterns to copy on their own, so you might as well define what you think is good writing.


A final tip is to adopt style conventions. A published style guide like The Gregg Reference Manual will save arguing over individual style choices. For example, battles rage over the serial comma (the use of the comma in a series in business and technical writing). All style guides except the Associated Press require the serial comma for a series like this: red, white, and blue. Because style guides can be a logical benchmark of best practices in writing and grammar, provide at least one copy of your chosen style guide per department. As a result, you will get more compliance when your writers understand where rules come from.


These strategies and others will improve the writing of those you manage and save you time and stress. Likewise, you'll become a better writer and can therefore lead by example. 


Results from April's quiz on commas for nonessential information 

 

Comma

Thank you to the 55 readers who participated in April's quiz on commas to set off nonessential information. Note the two commas in the correct answer:

 

"The largest product categories, speakers and in-dash CDs, were combined."

 

You'll see that 94.5% of my brightest readers used the commas correctly. Congratulations! One creative reader punctuated "product categories, speakers, and in-dash CDs" as a series and correctly used the serial comma.  

 

Good news: We are graduating from commas and moving on to the semicolon.

 

This month's grammar lesson: The semicolon

Although the comma has many uses, the semicolon has only two. This month, we'll cover the first (using the semicolon to join two independent clauses). Using a semicolon this way will help you create more variety in your sentence structure.  

 

Use a semicolon to join two independent clauses* that have a close logical relationship. Here are some examples:

  • Accounts Payable needs a new power supply; please order one immediately.
  • Please retrieve the file from my desk; theoretically, it is near the top of my in-basket.
  • The submission date has passed; however, we have heard that the committee may accept late proposals.

You might like to think of the semicolon as a "supercomma" because it separates independent clauses more forcefully than an equally correct comma-plus-coordinating-conjunction.

 

Now here's your quiz:  How would you punctuate this sentence?

 

Two units were closed on May 22, 2011 the last unit was closed on May 29, 2011.

 

Click here to punctuate the sentence above.  

 

*An independent clause contains a subject, verb (predicate), and a complete thought that can stand alone without other information.   

Navy SEALs, please help with comma terror
I just finished editing a 500-page proposal for a company that follows the journalists' style manual, the Associated Press Stylebook (AP).  Also known as the "journalists' bible," AP stresses that writers should NOT use a comma before the conjunction in a series (known widely as the serial comma).

To be fair, AP does allow the serial comma for a "complex series," although the distinction between simple and complex series is not always clear.

I have three main complaints about the AP position on the serial comma:
  1. Of all current style manuals, AP is the only one that does not require the serial comma.
  2. AP requires an author or editor to stop and make a decision about the complexity of a series of items. All other style manuals mandate that authors and editors clarify the structure of the series with the serial comma. This saves time and allows us to focus on more important issues in writing.
  3. A series without a serial comma may be confusing to the reader: "I ordered a hamburger, fries, cookies and ice cream." [Is cookies and ice cream one product or two?] The serial comma clarifies that there are four items.
So, please, Navy SEALs, can you just scale some firewalls and delete this provision from AP? Such covert action may not be quite as dramatic as your recent successes, but it will save a lot of comma terror in America.

 

I'm proud to announce that in May, I was named a Fellow of the Society for Technical Communication (STC) at the annual Summit Conference in Sacramento. This award is one of the highest honors in my career, and I am grateful to all the people in my life who made this possible.

Sincerely,

Elizabeth (Bette) Frick, PhD, ELS
The Text Doctor®